Hi I'm new here and I'm pretty new to spriting.
Exxucus introduced this site to me because he told me that I could get good critique here. Can't seem to get any critique at all from anywhere so far so I registered here.
...well here's my first sprite (that I'm proud of).


Oni Link

It's Fierce Deity Link from Majora's Mask in case you didn't know.
I think it's pretty good, but then again I'm pretty noobish.
So tell me what you think. Good or bad. Are there errors that I should fix etc.
And I already know he has no sword. I'm going to put that later.
Thanks in advanced.

Pretty good, the only think I can suggest; is get rid of the white on the face, its yucky...

Thank you. Little suggestions like that are what I'm looking for. :D
I tried and I think it looks better too. I only did that because a lot of the lords have that thing.
P.S. You're not talking about the eyes right. Because they're supposed to be white.

I like it, but the body may look better one pixel back, seems to be arking forward a little.

No, not the eyes, left of the eye is a two pixel white bar, that is absolutely dreadful when used on sprites...

Do you mean the torso?

All right. Changed it. But how come I've seen it on official sprites?

Yeah everything from teh waist up. And official sprites aren't as busy as yours with so many dark colors, it looks out of place.

I see. Thanks for the tip. I'll try to remember it. When I copied it into paint it looked a little darker than the original. Is that supposed to happen?
I'll try out changing what you said sometime. Although I sort of wanted that...I think. Wanted him to look a little buff. Maybe I did it too much.

Well if you stick out the chest further the torso would connect further back to support the chest increase.

Also it's probably a save change you may have copied a .png and pasted it into a 24-bit .bmp on paint. It's not a significant difference, in fact it's practically negligible especially if you're changing the pallet.

So what you're suggesting is that I move it back one pixel from the waist up then move the chest forward one pixel?
Also so far I've always saved my sprites as .png files. So when I copied it onto the original .png it was a little darker. Just wanted to know if that's supposed to happen. Is it better to save it as a .png or a .bmp?

No I'm saying move everything from the waste up (inclusing arms) one pixel to the right, our right.

Ok I did it, with some editting done below the waist. So better or worse?

Better

It's a wee bit tall, though it looks fairly decent. The hair is a bit too big for an FE sprite, and the nearer leg looks to be bent outward at an awkward angle.

Well he's supposed to be tall. In game he's pretty big so I wanted to keep him big.
The hair is actually his hat lol. I made it shorter at first but then I decided to make it longer because I thought it looked cooler.
The one on my right is the nearer leg, right? How should I fix it?

P.S. Since you're here happy birthday. <:)

I meant the bangs, not the hat. XD
It seems to be coming out at a different angle from the rest of the body. I suggest either moving the waist-crotch area one pixel right, or changing the angle of the foot more towards the left. You might also want to move the innermost pixels out one.

Thanks. :]

I see. I'll try changing the foot. That'll probably be the easier option.
As for the hair well, I'm satisfied with it...for now.

Why hello there. For your first sprite, quite good. A bit dark for FE, but W/E.

Hi. Thanks again. Well (fanboy moment) the power of the Fierce Deity mask could have more evil than Majora (end moment). But what does W/E mean? :?
Also I didn't know you were younger than me! For some reason I always thought you were like 4 years older than me lol.

Thats what I tend to think when I go to places like this. ;)
W/E I think means whatever.

Not completely done yet but I thought I would post it anyway.
Twlight Princess Link. Here he is.

The blade looks weird, otherwise, quite nice.

Thanks. You think I should make the middle part a lighter colour?
Is that what makes it look wierd?

Ok to show that I'm trying to make more sprites I'm gonna post my Soul Sprites that I'm currently working on. They're all still incomplete but it's better than having an empty gallery. Lets see if you can guess which each one is? (Not that it's that hard to guess if you've played the game.) The black line on some is how tall I plan to have them. These will be replaced as I edit them.

Had feet but I got rid of them cause they sucked...a lot. Too much shading? Too detailed? Tried too hard?

Thinking of making her have a pose similiar to her taunt.

Gonna make her have her fighting stance.

Gonna have her do her basic stance from the game. How does the ring blade look so far?

How do you make crossed arms?

The weapon will be behind her back and arms...I think.

Haven't decided on a stance for him yet. Probably crane style. Or his basic stance.

What's within your soul? o_ô

1.) Unreal looking pose for a small sprite, to much detail bad color choice.

2.) Small ass weapon

3.) Little bigger weapon but still mini dagger

4.) I can't figure out what's going on in this one

5.) Crossed arms make the under arm look jelly like

6.) Add a shade to the weapon to bland the edges looks to pixelated atm.

7.) y halo thar head

For the crossed arms, look at Merc's battle sprite. His character has his arms crossed, so you could probably use that for reference.

Siegfried
Cassandra
Sophitia
Tira
Taki
Seong mi na
Yun Seong

make Siegfried bigger imo, too much detail for a small sprite
lengthen Sophitias' and Cassandras' weapons
I recommend using a lighter outline on Tira's ring blade, and i recommend looking at fe weapon shading rather than having the two tones directly border each other
Taki's stance looks a bit odd i think you need her legs separated
Yun seoungs hair would look better with less jagged spikes, maybe more like a standing up look to it being almost flat on top with 1 pixel up 1 pixel down variations.

but thats just my opinion

Your Cassandra is turning out nicely so far, I would work off of Amelia's sprite, or full custom.

<:) Congratulations Vampire Elf <:)
You win a cookie for guessing all the characters correctly lol.
Thank you all for your comments and suggestions.

@ Merc: Thanks for the sprite reference. It'll help a lot. Amelia huh? I'll look into it.
@ VE: For Sieg I think I'm going to change his pose as well as have less detail. But he isn't that tall to begin with so I don't know if I'll make him bigger. I'll make the sisters swords longer. Was just trying to keep them short but I guess I went overboard. For Tira I was going to do that. They were just intended to be base colours for now. Taki's stance looks wierd to me too. I'll try out seperating her legs. I'll try changing Yun's hair as well.
@ AK: I wonder...if you didn't post this would Merc had put his sprite up? :?
@ LU: 1) Will change pose. Will have less detail.3) The wepons are actually the same size. I Just changed the colours a little lol. EDIT: Oh yeah I made the end on Sophitias longer. Forgot that. 4) It's a ringblade. 6) I'll shade but I'm not sure it'll matter if you won't be able to see most of it in the end. Not sure what atm means? 7) Head: "Hi! ^.^ "

Also it appears that Lord Jeff is awaiting me in the chatroom. Is that real?

Sigfreid needs a bigger armor, that guy is nothing with the big armor. If I remember his stance correctly, his hands don't go in front of his sensitive area, but next to this waist.

Can't believe I didn't even consider that! D: I will try making him have bigger armor. That's probably what Vampire Elf meant too...d'oh! Thank you. Ya waist...that would look less suggestive wouldn't it.

Ok all my attention has been going towards Taki recently. So here's what I have so far. Remember it's not done yet.

compare

I think the crossed arms look much better than before. Hope it looks good to you guys. Have to thank Merc for that. Used his sprite as reference. Although I had to make the left tricep look less ripped and look more girly. Hope I succeeded in that. What sucks though is that I can't get any boob in there which is a very defining trait of Taki. Oh well. Maybe I'll change it, probably won't.
I tried out seperating the legs but it didn't work out. So I put them closer togther instead. I think it looks ok so I'm keeping it that way for now. I'm still not completely satisfied with the feet though. Used BwdYeti's Bleach sprites as reference for those sandal things but my sprite is at a different angle than his.
So any help is appreciated. And wanted. :D

The one thing I would say is to have a ways to have the hands visible, it looks a little weird if you cover the hands with crossed arms, and don't forget to add her accessories also. ;)

Looks like zero suit samus to me and yeah you should show the hands.

Her right hand is a little tucked in there so I'll try and fix that. But her left hand is showing already...does it not look like a hand? >:/ Well I'll try modifying that.
And don't get me wrong azn. It's not that I don't want to add her "accessories" (because really who wouldn't <_< >_> ), it's just that they're hard to squeeze in there. But I'll see what I can do....Wait...you weren't talking about her swords and armor and stuff were you? XD

Zero suit Samus huh? I should remember that for the future...

Oh so the hand is there, well you might want to use a different color just to show the hand better.

All right. I'm finished the Taki sprite. Took a few hours but it's finished. I tried very hard on this. Hopefully it is up to all your expectations. And there is a bit of bewbge just like Taki should have. There are probably some errors so point them out for me will you plz?...Well here it is.



So tell me what you think. Is it good the way it is? Or not?...And if anyone says it just outright sucks...all of my self-confidence will be shattered into a million gajillion pieces...and I may just break down and cry. @_@ So be nice m'kay. :duh:

I like it only I think her elbows are to small

Wow, that looks really good. Plus it's nice to see someone doing battle sprites, since no one else seems to do them.