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Title: Shiruba


Shiruba - November 27, 2007 12:15 AM (GMT)
Character Information:

Real Name: Shiruba-hi
Code Name: Light
Eye Color: Dark brown
Hair Color:Dirty Blond
Height: 5' 10"
Weight: 180
Orientation: Straight
Affiliation: X-men
Age: 20
Play By: Chris Evans
Original or Canon: Original

Basic Physical Description:
Shiruba is a fairly tall man, roughly around 5' 10 5' 11. His hair short and blond, with some dark highlights in there. He is of great physical fitness, an athletic build if not anything else. His sex appeal is above even top models some would say, his toned stomach and chest usually shown out in the open. He usually wears a white tee shirt and a blue pare of jeans, all white shoes going along with them.

Personality: Shiruba, or Shi, as he likes to be called, Is very young hearted. He loves to goof around with others, and his idea of a good time is eating and fighting with others. He flirts a lot with female's, despite his late girlfriend. With his obnoxious personality, he tends to get into trouble. He loves to eat burgers and fries, mainly because they usually have a stinging spice to them. He also loves chicken, this food has always been with him, since he was very young.

This personality is completely different fro when he was younger, other then loving chicken, then his old personality, in the past, he was cold hearted and hated the world. He was alone and didn't know where to go. Now though, along with his arrogant heart, he has a strong passion for letting others do what he wanted to do, he'll help someone achieve the same goal as he once wanted, to make them happy. Whenever he gets angry, he tends to storm off from somewhere...to anywhere he can blow off some steam.

Though this is all very oddly strung together, it was caused by learning he was a mutant, losing his parents at a young age, and losing his girlfriend. Along with this odd put together personality, Shiruba is a very kind person, once someone gets to know him. His trust is a very hard thing to earn, because he does not want to lose someone again. Along with all of these oddity's on there own, Shiruba is a pacifist, he always lets the simplest things go, and even some of the heavier things that would urk anyones nerves.


Mutant Powers: Shiruba as gained the amazing gift of controlling gravity. This gift was given to him at birth but only manifested, when he really needed it to.e nothing more important then training it to the point where he can lift anything he wishes by making the gravity around something less. This power is limited however, he cannot lift anything beyond the weight of four hundred pounds, so lifting a fairly large man would not be to his best interest. This is the easiest aspect of his gift, and is essentially the easiest to control.

The apart of his powers that he has trouble controlling, is the ability to make the gravity double triple or such things along those lines. While he can make light things, such as bullets or small animals heavier, making things such as guns or humans, or large animals is beyond his reach.

Weaknesses: His powers aren't all fun and games though, whenever using these powers, mainly making things heavier. The nerves in his brain goes wacky, giving him a large painful migraine. This can be cured with normal pills and such, but in the midst of battle, it can prove to be deadly.

Another weakness that drives Shiruba crazy is, he blacks out rather easily. When lifting things up making the gravity lighter, he also causes the air around him to become much less dense, or not as rich in oxygen. This knocking him out cold within 20 minutes of using it, but also varies with how heavy the object is.

Other Abilities/ talents: Shiruba is pretty gifted at playing the drums. Practiced on a set until his fifteenth birthday, but he taught himself by watching concerts an music videos.

Basic History: Before birth~ Before Shi's 'unexpected birth'. His mother was a stay at home mom, her husband, Shi's Father' was a very powerful army general. As according, growing up, Shi would be disciplined like no other child. Months after his father had been discharged from the army for a few months to lay off and see his wife, him and Shi's mother planed on having a child. This would sadly become very hard, for his father was now sterile. A freak accident that happened months before, Shi's father was electrocuted, and somehow survived.

A few weeks later, after attempting to have a child, a man, ransacking homes for food, happened to run into there home, Shi's mother was home alone, and this man was a charged rapist. His disgusting lifestyle left him to rape shi's mother, impregnating her. His father came home when the man was done and eating their food, his mother crying in the corner, shook her head, but drove to the anger built away, Shi's mothers husband Shot the man, then himself. Now, as the months passed, Shi's mother would sadly give up on life and when giving birth, died from exhaustion.

Age 5~16
As the years past, Shi grew to be lonely, he had no friends, and his teachers hated him. He didn't know why, he did what he was supposed to, and even helped some of the other kids with their chores, but no one liked him. Two years later, a young girl moved into town, but not with her parents. Her parents were also killed and she didn't have anywhere to go. Shiruba was shy right now, he didn't know what to do with girls and he was only seven. He offered the girl some chicken, for some odd reason, Shiruba lvoed chicken, the taste just drove him crazy

Age 12, Shiruba started noticing some changes, and more then just body changes. when his emotions flared, he started to pull things down, or lift things up. When he became angry, when he was picked on, he was able to crush stuff around him. though as this happened, kid's hated him because he was different, the teachers got papers to kick him out of the orphanage. But luckily, one of the teachers sympathized, and this teacher was also head of the orphanage. Staying there was no problem, but surviving was a whole other story. He would learn to control these powers slowly as time went on, keeping them a secret from everyone.

The girl seemed to like Shi from the start and his purple eyes, rare as they were, struck fear into most people, but she loved them. She would always tease Shi, scared for him to know that she liked him, but in an odd turn of events, he liked her back. With the years, their bond grew and they started to see each other as more then just 'friends'. They attended the same high school, lovers form the start.

Age 17, and Shiruba loved her more then ever now. Sadly, this love would slowly perish, when Shiruba decided to take her out for their fourth anniversary. After the dinner he planned, they laughed and walked to the car. Shi let her in, and when he turned a large figure stood their. It was a mutant...something he heard about on TV. Another like him. It wore a big helmet, and cops were chasing after him, it seemed he robbed a bank. Shi turned his body, telling His girlfriend to get out of the car, but it was too late, Shiruba was knocked back, He got up, ready to fight, but not before his car was thrown by the big monster. His eyes became soulless. He started to chase after the car, but after only being 10 feet from the car. It blew apart. His love, was now gone He slowly began to hate the world, he wanted everyone to die off, rot in hell. This anger slowly began to subside though, while he still dislike a lot of people, moving in with professor X and the X-men taught him that he should just live his life the way he wanted to.

Citations: (Where did you get your information?) *Canon only.


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Sample RP: Shiruba awoke, his eyes full of empathy. He felt the pain of the citizens that must lay out in the cold weather of this damned city...He sighed and awoke. His eyes drifted from side to side. He hadn't been up this early since the beginning of his days at the House Professor X gave to all of the mutants. So he now stands tall alone, in his heart anyway. He moved himself, his legs hanging over the edge of the bed. He brushed his blond hair form his eyes and with a large sigh stepped off of his bed. He ran into his closet, luckily stopping himself before going head first into it. He opened it slowly, he gripped a white dress shirt and some black pants. He slipped them all on and sighed heavily. "Why am I up sooooo early?!" He asked himself, his voice seemed sterner then one could ever imagine.

He opened his window, not wanting to go the door, it was so far on the other side of the house. He used the window and jumped down. He was only on the first floor, so he didn't care. He spoke to himself, his eyes filled with so much pity for the citizens that hung out in this cold. This look, it was almost like he was sick. "Well, I guess I better get to work then" He spoke out, his duties were to clean any trash around the house. Nothing...as usual, he ran forward and stopped at the bench. Jumping over, he sat down, laying his head back.

"Damn, this say is so boring already," It was most likely around noon, or maybe one. He sighed heavily, the clouds slowly passed by the sun, it's rays becoming covered by those clouds. Remarkably, some found him odd for it, but Shiruba found these clouds to be beautiful. Nothing else could live free like this and move around like it was no one else's business. He laughed at himself and shut his eyes, waiting for th day to conclude itself, or training to start.

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Psion - December 3, 2007 12:39 AM (GMT)
Alrighty, I've read through this bio a couple of times and I am running into some kinks.

First off - I guess I'm just a little confused with the identity that you are trying to create for the character. What sort of name is "Shiruba-hi?" Is it related to his ethnicity? Does it have some sort of meaning? Secondly, he has white hair and purple eyes... as white hair is very rare and purple eyes do not occur naturally, are these manifestations of his mutation? And why does the play by look nothing like what you've described - (a seventeen year old boy with white hair and purple eyes as opposed to a man clearly in his twenties or thirties with dark hair?)

The best way to sum all of that up is to say that it just leaves a confused sense in my head and has a very anime feel to it as opposed to Marvel.

Secondly, though I appreciate the changes to the powers, you do need to include specific limits. You say that he can lift anything with his powers - and that just doesn't make sense to me. The heavier something is, the harder it should be to manipulate gravity and cause that item to lift. Maybe at maximum strength he can lift a car? a pencil? I would need specifics there.

The history is a bit disjointed and confusing. All this terrible stuff happened to him, but then he met Xavier and it's all ok?

And finally, and most importantly, you must run a spelling and grammar check on the bio. We all make mistakes in this area; we're human and in typing quickly things happen. Unfortunately, this bio is riddled with mistakes.

The biggest problem is punctuation. The comma usage in both the application itself and the sample RP causes the application to be very choppy. The bio begins with, for instance "Shiruba, is a fairly tall man."

If the punctation were fixed, it would improve it greatly. However, a full grammar and spelling check would help even more.


And those are my two cents on this application as it stands.

Psion - December 28, 2007 11:26 PM (GMT)
This application has been denied.




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