Name: Uten Jake Kinata

Gender: Male

Age: 18

IQ: 100

fur color: Red

eye color: Sky Blue

clothes: Black Shirt, Blue Jeans, Black Running shoes, and gloves

species: Red Fox, Kitsune, Fire Fox (NOT MOZILLA FIREFOX!!! lol.)

place of birth: Knothole Village

likes: Pizza, roller coasters, fighting, racing, and Nichi (his girlfriend)

dislikes: GUN, Broccoli, and his rival.

fears: his Girlfriend being killed right in front of his eye

enemies: Hesk Joseph Atiria the 3rd (Rival)

friends: Nichi Melania Sibella, Kari Elisabeth Minako, Tari Heather Minako, Jack Amaru Olhousen, Vector Rai Necolar, Sairika Ray Necolar, Yomi Kitoma Ichitaru, and Ana Kani

family: (...uhh ...I haven't come up with Family yet so) Deceased.

abilities: Power over fire.

alliances: Freedom Fighters

personality: normally he's an easy going nice guy but if you manage to piss him off which doesn't happen often you may as well plan for your grave right then

allies: Sonic, Tails, Knuckles, Shadow, Amy, everyone on his friends list, and all the Freedom Fighters.

forms: Uten's formes

level-up items: None

history: I was never any good at typing Bios so i tell my Characters story through Role Play

cool charctor! ^^

BTW whos his girlfriend??

*cues anime thunder and lightning*

Alright, I'm afraid you're going to have to feel my wrath, bud. First, what the heck is up with that IQ? Do you know how rare that is? A 180 IQ-on the dot-is probably about a one in ten-thousand chance. It's also really quite stereotypical. Reduce the IQ some because I know that we're never going to see that IQ in action in an actual RP. Next, fur color, eye color, and clothes. First off, you could put that all in one section. Also, what's unique about his looks? He has...red...fur? Sky blue eyes? And what on earth is a Fire Fox? What sets him apart from every single other fan character ever made? From what I'm seeing, nothing. Friends. Who are these people you talk about? How did he meet them? Personality. Go into DETAIL. DEEETAAAAIIIILLLL. PLEASE PLEASE. Allies? How did he meet these people? Why does Sonic wanna spend his time with a Gary-Sue instead of hangin' with Tails and Knuckles? Forms. Okay, we see a picture. What do these forms do? Does he just look more prettiful when he changes forms? Or does it actually change him?

And we get to our dear friend history. You say you're going to tell it through RPing? Okay. But it's going to be hard to get into an RP if we know NOTHING about them. You don't have to say anything too much, but give us at least a general idea of his history. Give us the NEEDED info, and no more.

BRILLIANT!! THAT is THE BEST scolding I've gotten. (<==thats true I've never got one more descriptive of all problems.)

now heres the explanation for all of that

180 IQ: I did that by mistake I use the numbers above the letters, and i meant to put 100, not 180.

Fur color, eye color, and clothes: this is an old format I've been using since finding it of the now closed Mystic Fox Fox Forums. so I didn't change a thing as far as the choice in profile creation.

the Firefox thing: a fire fox is a mythical creature that seems to be very popular so I decided to use it as Uten's species.

Friends: all of the characters is the friends section are all of Uten's friends (duh) except Nichi whom is Uten's Girlfriend. nothing further on friends

Personality: what I can't be simple?

Allies: I don't know why Sonic would want to hangout with Uten rather then Tails and Knuckles.

Forms: okay it's kind of obvious that Uten has a Super, Normal and, Dark form. the super form it does the SAME THING as every super form. the dark form ...darker versions of Uten's normal abilities as well as a few extras

History: ...I can't think of one that'll stick with him well.

Why thank you.

As for the IQ, I see, we all have typos on the 0k@55i0l\l

Appearance and all that: Well, you can keep the format the same if you wish, but go into slightly further detail. Is his shirt a bit too big for him? Is his fur slightly shaggy, or does he keep it trimmed fine? It may seem irrelevant at the moment, but believe me, this stuff can help when trying to make a better RP post.

I can live with the fire fox.

Friends? Well, at least make sure you explain who they are in RPs, since you say that his bio's going to be explained through RPs.

Personality: Simple yet thorough. We need to truly know what your character's like. Merely saying that "he's nice but when he gets mad he gets REALLY mad" doesn't quite cover his personality. A living being's personality range is really quite broad, so maybe covering it in a bit more detail would help.

Allies: Exactly.

Forms: Yes, yes, looking from the pictures it's obvious. But what do these forms do? A super form or dark form usually increases the character's power. Does it increase strength, or merely speed? Or both? How much are these increased? How did he receive these forms, and why can he go into them? How can he mutate his power like so?

History: If you can't think of it, how will it be revealed in RPs?

Remember, this is just constructive criticism, and I'm just trying to help at least.

well I use the small format for the males and the big format for the females don't ask why i didn't make a big post, I'm just lazy.