Title: shade the dragon
Description: draco and lucells worst fear
tailsfan55 - February 21, 2009 01:18 AM (GMT)
Name:shade
Age:19
Species:dragon
Gender:male
DOB:13/3/1990
Birth Place:N/A
Residence:unknown
Basic Stats (added numbers cannot exceed 40)
Agility -5
Speed -5
Strength -10
Defense -4
Evasiveness -3
Dexterity -4
Intelligence -5
Skill -4
Special Attacks:dark shot
Weaknesses:lust for revenge
Personal facts
Friends:none
Known relatives:N/A
Favorite color(s):black
Personality:evil
bio:When Shade was young, he was feared at home. In the streets, over time, he started to become feared and later be became a mob leader. Shade knew Lucell from her father. He had to pay Shade taxes and when he couldn’t pay it: Shade made a threat to eliminate the thing he loves most. One time Shade had given Lucell a week to pay, but Lucell still did not have enough money to pay him. So he set after Lucell, but before he could do any damage to her; Draco came and killed him or so they thought. The sword missed his heart, but he was in severing pain and was knocked out over several hours… When he came to his conscious state of mind: wound had healed and he was at full strength! Now he sets out for revenge on Lucell and Draco for not paying him and also trying to kill him! thanks Scitt Emerald :T0:
supertails07 - February 21, 2009 01:54 AM (GMT)
| QUOTE (tailsfan55 @ Feb 20 2009, 08:18 PM) |
Basic Stats (added numbers cannot exceed 40)
Agility -33
Speed -33
Strength -40
Defense -29
Evasiveness -27
Dexterity -39
Intelligence -39
Skill -30 |
Added numbers is 270... quite the godmod, besides the fact that those are supposed to be out of 10 i believe.
Also, please add periods between sentences in your bio, it's VERY hard to read at the moment. Proper capitalization would help too.
The stats you have listed as N/A are quite applicable, thank you.
Evil isn't a personality.
It's spelled unknown.
You listed a person as a weakness, which isn't the purpose of the field.
Oh, and this is a fan character and belongs in the forum for such.
Morgan the Hedgehog - February 21, 2009 04:36 AM (GMT)
Yes and I'm the mod to do it!
*move*
Sunshine the fox - February 21, 2009 07:36 PM (GMT)
Well I haven't seen very many Dragon characters before. XD
Scitt Emerald - February 28, 2009 05:41 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE |
| bio:when he was young he was feared at home in the streets over time he engoed being feared and later be became a mob leader he knew lucell from her father he had to pay shade taxes but when he coul'nt pay it shade made a theret to elimanate the thing he loves most whice was lucell he gave him a week but still not enoughe so he set after lucell but before he could do any damge to her draco came and killed him or so they thought the sword missed his heart but he was in sever pain and was knocked out over seval hours when he came to his wound hads healed and his was at full stragth now he sets out for revenge on lucell and draco |
I did the grammer for you, Tailsfan 55! :)
Bio:
When Shade was young, he was feared at home. In the streets, over time, he started to become feared and later be became a mob leader. Shade knew Lucell from her father. He had to pay Shade taxes and when he couldn’t pay it: Shade made a threat to eliminate the thing he loves most. One time Shade had given Lucell a week to pay, but Lucell still did not have enough money to pay him. So he set after Lucell, but before he could do any damage to her; Draco came and killed him or so they thought. The sword missed his heart, but he was in severing pain and was knocked out over several hours… When he came to his conscious state of mind: wound had healed and he was at full strength! Now he sets out for revenge on Lucell and Draco for not paying him and also trying to kill him!
I hope you don't mind.
Other than that, I like the story! ^_^ Nice names, I like the name Lucell. ANytime you need your characters drawn- PM me! ^-^
Speed-X - February 28, 2009 05:46 PM (GMT)
You should probably have a pretty good explanation as to HOW he exists as a dragon-- dragons are mythical creatures that don't neccessarily exist (NOT including Dulcy from Archie. That's just how Archie is).
I personally think that you should add more supporting details behind everything in the background... such a dark background story. Well, it's not that I don't really like dark bg stories or anything, but I think that almost anyone could put down something like, "Feared by everyone on streets, became mob leader, so-and-so threatened to kill the one thing he loves [especially that part], etc." Like I said, I'm not saying it shouldn't be dark, it's just that you need a little more detail to make it seem a little more... original. I really don't think I'm making much sense, though.
Yes, and the basic stats exceed WAAAY over 40, but that's okay if y'didn't know what it meant by "added numbers cannot exceed 40'; I didn't have an idea of what it meant when I first saw that fan-char fill-out sheet, either. Of course, I was... quite young at that time.
I'm sure that we'd all also like to see an image of him. I myself am curious. ^^; But this is mainly a suggestion.
Just keep at it-- you seem to be merely a work in progress. ^_^
the black phantom - March 2, 2009 06:29 PM (GMT)
that dragon character dulcy was from SATAM(or what ever its called)
truthfully i think this is one of the most origonal sonic fan characters
Speed-X - March 4, 2009 10:46 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE (the black phantom @ Mar 2 2009, 01:29 PM) |
that dragon character dulcy was from SATAM(or what ever its called)
truthfully i think this is one of the most origonal sonic fan characters |
Yeah, but she's also Archie. P:
I'm getting off-subject. Whoops.