INTRODUCTION-the distant golden
it was a sunny day...normal,and Tails was relaxing outside his house
then,sonic ran into him at supersonic speed,sending tails flying a couple of
miles away "SOOOOOOOOONIC!"-screamed tails-"oops...my bad"-then sonic ran to get him "what have you smoked?"nothing...
"yeah..." so then they talked to each other until sunset
"so...lemme get this straight...golden is trying to defeat eggman"-"jup"-"and he is?"
"about to be killed!" ah well...*blows a whistle* lets go!
END OF INTRODUCTION

I can see the work here, but the dialogue needs to be separated for a better comprehension on who's saying what. I'm just wondering what Golden is, some type of secret weapon??? I dunno XP

oops...well...here we go
CHAPTER ONE-Golden times in sunset hill,blazy times in fireway )part one)
tails:so...who is tis golden again? i know we know him but that hit in the head erased some more things that i would wanted to...
*walking in Green Hill in sunset*
sonic:hehe...sweet revenge
Tails:'scuse me?
Sonic:it is our friend...y' know...red eyes...ummm...golden fur...hedgehog,0dark attitude? looks like you,me and shadow ?
tails:oh,yeah...golden...brother of silver and bronze?*
sonic:jup
Tails:well...letz go!
Sonic:he and his "z's"
Me:meanwhile,in other dimension
Solaris:*roar*(i hate being here...is oooo moldy)*GROOOOARR!!*
*splits in Mepiles and iblis,iblis freezes(literally)*
Mephiles:at last i am in la quinta china!(the fifth cina)
Me:<_<
Mephiles:well then*ahem* MUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHUHAHAHAHAHA
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaa....*cough* *cough* *wheeeeze* **** YOU,LUNGS!!!
[in fireway ]
Golden:......you...robotnik......
EggMan:stop it!,will ya?
Golden:i can't use fire blast control but i got the aquacontrol...that is the only thing i can use with my low power right now... well robotnik
Eggman:cutitout!!!
Golden:i shall say Aquacontrol!!!!


*in my comics
FEEDBACK!!! :FeedMe:

CHAPTER 1 PART 2
Golden: aquacontrol!!
Eggman:OMG!!!
*the water flushes all the lava and the lava freezes*
Golden:that is what you get messing with me!!!...now,how the tacos i get out of here?
Sonic:so? need a little help?
Tails:yah! what he said!
Golden:ok,so? what are you goin...
*they break the chains*
Golden:thanks...i owe you one
???:you see like you were just about to die...are ya?
Sonic,Tails and Golden:what?
Silver:well...you know me...and you will die with the honor of it!
All:WHA?!?!?!
*they dissapear in the darkness*
END OF CHAPTER 01

Random, but good nonetheless ^^

HEY!!
here is a side note...explaining my form of story format:
its like paper mario the thousand year door...
CHAPTER X
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...----------------"----"!!!
END OF CHAPTER X
-inter(random things)
INTRO OF CHAPTER Y
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----"_--"
CHAPTER Y
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"-"means text
:TailsSmile:
working on the next chapter
Silver:you are not!!!
Me:SHUTUP!!! :TailsMad:
Silver: :blink:
I rule!!!( in my colony.).. :TailsHappy:

inter
???:come on...
?????:nawp...
???come on,cream...
cream:no amy!!!! we have to be brave!!! we have to...
*a ladybug passes by*
Cream:WAGH!!! A GHOST!!!!!
Amy:...say? brave?
Cream: i was only joking!!!
Amy:anyway...they told me that golden was in
Both:FIREWAY!?!?!
Cream...its...icecap here?
EDl/l

tails:so...who is tis golden again? i know we know him but that hit in the head erased some more things that i would wanted to...
Sonic:it is our friend...y' know...red eyes...ummm...golden fur...hedgehog,dark attitude? looks like you,me and shadow ?
tails:oh,yeah...golden...brother of silver and bronze?
Sonic:yes
Golden:......you...robotnik......i shall say Aquacontrol!!!!
???:you see like you were just about to die...are ya?
Sonic,Tails and Golden:what?
Silver:well...you know me...and you will die with the honor of it!
All:WHA?!?!?!
*they dissapear in the darkness*
CHAPTER 02 WHERE THE HEDGEHOGS GO
Tails:where are we?
Sonic:me no know
Shadow:so...ni..c
Golden,Sonic and Tails: WHAT THE HEY?!?!
Shadow:careful of*FWAGH* Me...you will die in hands of silver!
*maniac laugh**dissapears*
Silver:welcome...my dear guests...join or die! that is the menu for today!
Sonic:never!
Golden:...i have to go with my brother...
Sonic:no!!!
Tails:neither!
Silver:well then die!
Sonic:i will fight if it is necessary!
Silver:stubborn little rat! i will kill you if you dont come and join me!
Golden:brother! what happens to you? you are not like this!
Silver:SHUT UP!
*Golden dissapears*
Sonic:well then? are you going to fight?
Silver:its a waste of time...farewell!
Sonic:WAGH!
Tails:???
*now,both are in the house*
Tails:...*groan* whoa! that was some messed up dream
sonic? sonic? are you awake?
no! you must not! you are awake right? you must be all right! you have to be awake!!!
tails is very angry with silver,yet confused...how could silver kill sonic? how is he able to kill? why is he evil now? why? who?
when?where?when?
now, with sonic dead...he must have revenge! he has to fight! he has to make a war...
the war of the foxes and hedgehogs!!!

END OF CHAPTER 02
in the next chapter:
Tails is very angry! he has to get revenge...but he,alone...he cant...so now is recluting foxes to do war aganaist silver!
stay here to see the next chapter:
the foxes revealed!

Hey, the recruiting sounds like a load of fun ^^
Mind if Sly, in his Fox form, is recruited? Bio's in my sig. He'll be in the first page and information about the form will be there also. Other than that, if you don't know, then you can ask me.

Worth a while reading, but i am not hooked on a stick to read more. But it is okay work dough. :TailsSmile:

Okay! I would love to join. :TailsSmile:

please use the edit button, also no double posting or bumping please ^_^

i have got only 05 to 10 foxes and 00 hedgehogs...
well...anyone up? just pm me and i will add you,
to the ones already in this...check my created topics, i will
soon create a chat topic to put up together the "pieces" of the story

I bet this is going to be a very good story! ^_^

lol...why no one happens to join???...THAT'S IT!!!
NO MORE!!! I HAVE TO FINISH THIS!!! :angry:
<_< hahh...well to work again
silver: you slacker
Me: shut up...will ya?
Silver: NEVER!!! YOU WILL NOT SILENCE ME
tails: :TailsShock:

that was a bump by 6 months, max allowed is 1, do the math.

now, where's a mod?

OMG I'M ALIVE!!!
do ya know what i was doing?
practicing my english and writing skills!!!
Yahoo!!!
the war will begin...coming soon, revamped
btw, Golden is not a hedgehog now.....
he's a Riolucario!!! yay for pokemonnoobness!!! :TailsHappy:

Here, the new story:

The war of the foxes and hedgehogs:
Chapter 1, the Golden beginning

It was a cloudy, cold winter day...our favorite two-tailed fox was resting in his garden, lying there, in the grass...enjoying the wind...

suddenly, out of nowhere, Sonic ran over him, shouting - Tails!!! Tails!!! where are you??? its an emergency!!!! - Tails glared at Sonic, who left him with a footprint -marked chest... then, he shouted - Yo, sonic!!! i'm here!!! - Sonic looked over where to Tails was, and ran to him...

after some minutes of intense talking, Tails shouted at the top of his lungs: -Golden WHAT?!?!?!?! - Sonic sighed, and said- are you deaf or something??? he was captured by someone...i dunno who, tho...and the communicator does not work!!!! - Tails looked at a nearby mountain, realizing his second best friend was in trouble...he said, then- We gotta save him... - Sonic glared at Tails with a " ty, capt. obviousity" look, then, he said - isnt that phrase overused???-

they both ran to the forest, in hopes they may find a Sign

[End Chapter 1]

why did they run to the forest if they dunno where Gold is???
hmmmm

tell me what you think, btw :TailsSmile:

i'll be writing, see ya!

i would like if ya told me how to put the "long - thingie" i would be very grateful...

and nvm about recruiting.... i changed the story... but i could add a fan char cameo if ya want! :T0:

Mmmmkay...is anyone gonna read this???
*Grrrrowl*