ShortAssassin's Verse

Why you fucking with me Mats, I'm SA the Great,
After this you gonna be running from me as if you were straight,

Funny how the tables turn, you supposed to be the rapist dude,
Yet it appears to me that I'm the one raping you

In this battle of course, not literally,
I don't go that way, I don't swing for that team,

Your punches hit like a nerf gun, shits to weak
How you bringing that to a fight when I brought WMDs

After my verse drops Bush gonna be after me
"Why'd you bomb the UK SA, are you fucking crazy?"

Maybe I should come softer, just bring my peice
Do you in that shout out ya name, "Peace!"

If your rhymes are as predictable as your spinning, don't even drop
Every one of your battles: TAs, IAs, and an Elbow Pop

Learn new shit or don't put out so many vids
I know why UCPSBs dying, you scaring away all the little kids

"He's been spinning for years and thats all he can do?"
"I'll give up now before I embarass myself like this fool"

"Is that even a dude? Look at that long hair!"
I might look like Harry Potter, but you look like Cher,

I'm too nice at this game man, you can't beat me,
Ask your friends...wait, do you have any?

Sorry I had to come so hard, I don't like being mean
But I'm sure you get plently of love from your Cock Tugging Team


Mats' Verse

Hey shortassassin, strat's little bitch,
I'm chillin playing ball, while you're sucking his dick,

I might be the rapist, but a bit unlike you,
I rape women and wack rappers, not my friend whose a dude,

I'm sorry SA, let's lay off your gayness,
It's old picking on how you take it in the anus,

Let's talk some about your punches instead,
you punch, I shoot, fuck, SA's dead,

SA the assassin, on a team that's the best?
shit son, you're on a team that's still learning to get dressed?

My team will beat you, like rookee beat phya,
only difference this time, our shit's even flyer,

So before you go out saying crazy taxi's this or that,
Remember you're on a team led by a cocksucker, strat,

oh shit, i'm sorry, said you're gay again,
I'll lay of that shit now, cos we know already you like men,

and this rap game kid, this shit aint for you,
You rap worse than a 90 year old jew,

yeah, i said jew, are you gonna go cry?
Get out of here son, this shit's too fly,

we don't like pussies like you in this game,
grow some balls SA, and go earn your name,

on the streets motherfucker, the street, know that place?
didn't think so nerd, they would punch in your face.

Ok first of all, it was supposed to be 12 not 24, but here are my points:

SA: The first half of your free was weak, and focused too much on useless points with no punch lines. The 2nd half was pretty dope, and was solid. If you mixed around your lines more, and put in more punches, it would've been a solid free.

Mats: All around that wasn't that great. I didn't feel any strong lines from you, and it was built up really messily. Some words didn't even rhyme correctly, and there were grammar errors.

I have to give this one to SA.

Thanks for the comments Rookee.

Both had good and bad lines(mostly bad), but SA had more good ones. I voted for him, sorry Mats <_<

in UK they do.

you + dude? Phya + flyer? Bitch + dick?

dont ask me im not brit.

Dude and you and bitch and dick are half-rhymes. They work with the flow if you say it. All the other words rhyme.

literally + team?

I really thought the first half of SA's was wack. Real wack.

btw, my name should suggest i'm not a rapper, but a balla.

I already said SA's first half was shit.

I was just agreeing. :lol:

Why the double standard?

I just wondered why mine were pointed out and why his wasn't.
But hey whatever :lol:

Ah, alright.

I only voted Mats cause his seemed more fun...

this is a forum GAME >_> i dont look into things as deeply as some of you do apparently.

I voted SA, but he didn't win by much. Both verses could use more punchlines and personals and less filler. Fillers are not always bad; their purpose is to make smooth rhyming transitions, but you shouldn't overuse them.

E.g.

needs more punch(line) behind it!

Consider alluding to pop culture or PS (without saying it directly):
"His rhymes are off-balance like he couldn't really COP it
He should name his pen Huey the way he pops, locks and drops it"


The verses also need some work on the rhyming. Half rhyming (slant rhyming) flows well but only with certain words and the right number of syllables. That's why literally + team didn't sound too good, and Phya + flyer, should've been typed as Phya + flya.

Em is a rapper who used slant rhyme very well:

"Cause see they call me a menace; and if the shoe fits I'll wear it
But if it don't, then y'all'll swallow the truth grin and bear it
Now who's these king of these rude ludicrous lucrative lyrics
Who could inherit the title, put the youth in hysterics
Usin his music to steer it, sharin his views and his merits
But there's a huge interference - they're sayin you shouldn't hear it
Maybe it's hatred I spew, maybe it's food for the spirit
Maybe it's beautiful music I made for you to just cherish
But I'm debated disputed hated and viewed in America
as a motherfuckin drug addict - like you didn't experiment?
Now now, that's when you start to stare at who's in the mirror
and see yourself as a kid again, and you get embarrased
And I got nothin to do but make you look stupid as parents
You fuckin do-gooders - too bad you couldn't do good at marriage!"


Anyway, it's just for fun, but there's my $0.02.

Thanks FB.